─ .✦ If your villain monologues for more than two paragraphs, your hero should’ve escaped by now or at least checked their phone. Real people don’t wait politely for evil speeches to finish. They interrupt, get bored and say things like “okay but can you get to the point I have dinner plans.”
─ .✦ Stop having your characters look in mirrors to describe themselves. Your protagonist doesn’t wake up and think “I looked at my reflection and saw my shoulder-length auburn hair and piercing green eyes.” They think “ugh I look like death” and move on. Find literally ANY other way.
─ .✦ If every sentence in your action scene is the same length it reads like a grocery list with violence. Short punchy sentences for fast moments. Longer flowing ones when they catch their breath and realize oh god that hurt. Variety is your friend and so is rhythm.
─ .✦ Your character can cry without it being beautiful. Let them be UGLY. Let their face get blotchy and their nose run and their eyes puff up. Let them hiccup and gasp and wipe snot on their sleeve. Crying IS GROSS!
